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So you don't know where you're going and you wanna talk

And you feel like you're going where you've been before

You'll tell anyone who'll listen but you feel ignored

Nothing's really making any sense at all

Let's talk,
let's talk

Let's talk,
let's talk

Speedpaint: [link]
This drawing was based on the following old work: [link]
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albaoaurora Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Student General Artist
Hey! You contacted me about this deviation some months ago, sorry for the late critique D:

You improved a lot since you made the original deviation, that's really awesome. The first thing I noticed was the boy, whose proportions are a lot more realistic, and the pose (as well as the style) is more loose and flows better. The face is really cute too :) Another thing is the background, you really did super well on it. I noticed that you added more detail to the cityscape, making it more realistic, even though it's still stylized. I see that you planned out the city more, which is great :D Also great use of atmospheric perspective, making the background buildings a lighter color to make them look far-off. I would suggest to blur the lines a bit on the waaaay background stuff though, to strengthen the illusion of it being far away.

Also whoah, look at those clouds. I really like what you did here, there's some depth to that. And like with the city background, the clouds also look like they're receding, and that's really cool.

As for the boy, the lighting on him seems pretty consistent, and like I said before, the pose is better. Also, there's more emotion showing through, which is awesome. I really like the hair too. The one thing is that the folds look really spikey and unnatural, try making the rounder and softer. Also it looks like you placed some of them there because you felt you had to (don't worry, I do that all the time), but try to follow the way clothing would fall upon the body instead. Jean folds are tough though, those are pretty illogical sometimes :|

Well, sorry for the late (and long!) reply, I hope it helps somewhat. I'm really happy to see this deviation though, it's super great~
Amaliee Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Jeez. You've improved so much since last year.... crazy.
From his expression to his pose, you've done such a great job displaying emotion. Plus, I absolutely LOOOOOOVE that background.
I know that I'm a month late, but would you still like a critique? c:
Monochrome0 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Anytime is fine, Amaliee :3
Amaliee Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Well the shading looks really great! The hair is my personal favorite. However, since he's outdoors on a rainy day, he's a bit "bright" looking. If you play a bit with the brightness & contrast filter on SAI you'll see how desaturating the picture by just a small amount can make a world a difference. ~

The only other thing that sticks out to me would be the clothing folds. Folds follow a kind of pattern. I'll have to red line your picture to show you. Here we go :: [link]

Okay so the blue is the major areas that effect how folds work (the back can also be included in that as well). It's basically like the old ball & cloth trick: you place a fabric over a ball and you see how it smooths at the top and then goes all crazy towards the middle-area. The same thing applies to people! I tried to find a good reference picture and that was the best I could find. But the point is that you can see how when the hood is over the man's head, it sags downward due to gravity. And then on the arm there are A LOT of folds because his elbow is causing the fabric to bunch up.

I hope I explained everything right. I need to practice giving critiques more often. OTL Let me know if something doesn't make sense. ~
Ryotsu-san Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013  Student General Artist
Me gusta.

His pose looks really cool, the whole picture has a wonderful atmosphere of suspense. He doesn't have a knife hidden in his sleeve, does he? :XD:
Knight0077 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
catbat102102 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
jokoshang Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I seriously love seeing people's progress, you definitely worked on what you specified before as being areas for improvement! You went beyond, I think at least! This is a really nice piece; your back ground looks awesome, your shading is nice and smooth, and the text really goes with it! I hope to see some more soon!^^
ZaknRaphAdventures Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013   Artist
the journey the LOOONG arduous Artist's Journey
AuraWriter Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013
Monochrome0 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
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